Eat local. I can’t. Council’s turned all the bins into ones you can’t look into. I’m not rooting around in rubbish on the off-chance.
Sleep local. I would. Not allowed anymore. Shop’s complained. I’d leave way before they opened. It’s the warmth seeping out that made me sleep in the entrance. Since sleeping by the river, I can’t shake the sniffles.
Read local. I’d like to. You know how much a book costs? More than a day’s worth, these days. Mind, they don’t want me in there since the owner changed.
Had a life here once.
New town, I reckon.
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Today, I’ve joined Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers for their inaugural challenge – find all the stories here.
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Oh I’m so glad you’re a part of the challenge as well!
I liked this a lot – I love the use of short sentences, I find myself using them a lot too so I really appreciate that!!
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Thank you! I’m a big fan of short sentences. I think I over-use them sometimes…
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Oh sometimes I think I do too. I think they’re lovely.
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Thank you for participating in the challenge! I love your story, but it is sad being it’s about a rejected homeless person. I imagine that just about all homeless people feel rejected by the people in their city.
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Thank you for your comment, PJ!
I’m glad there’s another challenge for me to participate in. Since I’ve embarked on this mad project of writing a story every day, I need all the inspiration I can get.
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Great! I am happy to hear that it works out perfectly for you. I love doing flash fiction – it is just FUN!
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Great take on this prompt, Sonya. Like how you used the window sign to let the narrator tell the story.
Ellespeth
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Thank you, Ellespeth! I love picture prompts – they offer a tiny glimpse into a writer’s brain by showing which part of the picture got it going. Mine just snatched up the words and ran with them 🙂
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A really great piece for this prompt, Sonya. It’s concise and you make every sentence count. You’ve delivered the sad problems of this homeless man with quite a punch. Well done! 🙂
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback (again), Millie! I have to say I thought this one turned out better than I’d hoped. Pictures are great prompts, though.
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A very poignant take on the prompt Sonya ~ Homelessness must be so tough to endure ~ 🙂
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John, thank you for reading and commenting! And yes, it must be so tough.
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I agree with Ellespeth, that is a very clever use of the sign in the window. The short sentences work well too. They are abrupt and in my eyes can symbolise how abruptly something can end for a homeless person. One minute he/she may be in one place, the next in another.
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Francesca, thank you for your response. I love your comment about the abruptness of the sentences and how they reflect the changes in the characters life 🙂
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Great story and his character came through in the short sentences
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Thank you, Cat! Good to hear (rem, read…) it 🙂
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What a great story! Our city has many restrictions as well…thank goodness our subways are open from 5am to 1am and most homeless persons can stay until 11:30 to midnight…the winters are hardest for them here.
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Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment!
It’s difficult for them here, and we don’t even get proper winters. Well, it is still too cold to stay outside for long.
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There are so many at the Métro when I travel to and from work…thank goodness it is very warm in our subways compared to many cities.
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Love the way you wrote this Sonya, very clever and creative. Well done.
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Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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