Here’s the next instalment of the Salvage Series, inspired by PJ’s photo for FFfAW. You don’t have to read it all, though, I hope it will stand on its own.
Ben comes home after a long day of emptying lobster pots and finds Donna’s taken down their wedding photograph. He puts it back where it belongs. Donna’s gone out. He’s tired, but not as tired as he is of her games. He waits for her.
‘Trying to tell me something?’
Donna shrugs.
‘Is this what’s it’s all about? You want out of the marriage?’
Silence.
‘I won’t take the blame for you. You want a divorce, you’ll have to say it.’
Donna shrugs and disappears. Ben pulls the blanket over himself. He doesn’t feel like sleeping next to her anymore.
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You’ll find all FFfAW stories here.
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I don’t think either one of them knows for sure what they want. Enjoying the series so far, and yes, I think this one does stand well on it’s own.
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That’s good to hear, I’m trying hard to make them work without context. Thank you, Nortina 🙂
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Excellent Sonya! You can feel the tension between them. (Icy cold). It does stand alone very well.
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Thanks again, PJ 🙂
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It’s really hard to argue if it is all one sided! Maybe she is just extremely upset with him right now, or waiting for him to make the next move. I’m interested to see what happens next.
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I don’t think it’s not one-sided. But Ben’s sleepwalked into the situation, while Donna’s actions are more deliberate.
Thank you, Jessie!
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I think you’ve done a great job of making this stand on its own. I love the atmosphere you create between the two … full of hurt and indecision (though perhaps more from Ben than Donna). Donna seems rather indifferent in this piece. Perhaps future episodes will prove me wrong.
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Thank you, Millie! Glad it works on its own. It’s getting more difficult, so I hope I’ll manage to wrap it up soon…
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I’m impressed by how you’ve kept it going! Well done you. 🙂
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Cheers 🙂
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The dialogues actually gave me a concert of how they feel, and that is a great thing. I think they are in a bad place in their marriage bit at the same time, I font thin of they are headed for divorce. Maybe this is just wishful thinking. But great job with the dialogue.
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Thank you, Ameena 🙂
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Great take on the prompt using the wedding picture rather than the church. I enjoyed the dialogue and awkward silences too! Great title.
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Thank you 🙂
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