The dark cloud hanging over Ben has gone. He tells himself not to overreact, the respite might be brief. But his relief refuses to be contained. It bursts out as a laugh.
‘It wasn’t that funny a joke,’ Tina says.
Before Ben has a chance to explain, a thunder cloud descends upon them.
‘You lying bastard, you swore there’s nothing between you. Good thing I never believed a word of it.’
‘Wait a second,’ Tina interjects, but Donna’s unstoppable.
‘Shut up, tart.’ She slams her hand down. ‘I want a divorce. Happy?’
‘No,’ he says, even though he might be.
***
I suspect this may be the penultimate instalment of the Salvage Series.
*The title is a reference to the shipping forecast and actually refers to visibility – but poor visibility is usually accompanied by rain, so it is somewhat appropriate.
Wow Sonya… I just read through all of you Salvage stories for the last few days.. this is getting so interesting and I love the switching back and forth… Are you going to continue the story during June?
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Thank you, Lori, that’s very encouraging feedback! I am trying to somewhat wrap it up today – it is getting more and more tricky to write instalments that will work as stand-alones. But I may come back to it. I want to play around with Jacqui some more, get into her head, find out what motivates her. But I think I will put the series up on WattPad, and if the reaction there is positive, I might write some more.
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Oh I would love to learn more about Jacqui too… she has peaked my interest.. What is WattPad? I’ve never heard of it
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WattPad is a social site for writers and readers – it’s really popular with teens, and since my novels are YA, I’ve been meaning to give it a try. Have to figure out how to make covers first, though… More info here, if you’re interested: http://www.wattpad.com/about
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Cool, Sonya 🙂 thanks! I will look into it
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It feels like Donna has a self-fufilling prophecy on her hands – has she pushed Ben into thinking of something he might not have done if she hadn’t kept banging on about it?. I’m all geared up for the last instalment.
I love that last line – ”No,’ but wondering if he might be.’ Reallly tantalising.
This has been such a great serial and a great idea. Are you planning another? I read your posts anyway, but the on-going element has really drawn me in. Are you planning to post the complete story on your long- form blog?
Great stuff, Sonya 🙂
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Thank you, Lynn!
Yes, you’re spot on about Donna. That’s the thing that set the series in motion, really. When I wrote the second instalment, I still thought Ben and Tina’d died in the sub. But then I had this idea about the self-fulfilling prophecy…
I’m glad you like the title – I was rather proud of coming up with it 🙂
I think I’ll write another serial, but I might take a bit more time planning it in advance. With this one, I was very much winging it. I had no idea what made Donna act like she did, for instance.
And I don’t know yet if I’m going to put it all up as one long post on the other blog, or if I’ll post it to WattPad – I’ve been meaning to give it a try, and at least I’ve got a somewhat complete serialised story (even though I may have to plug a few gaps towards the end…). We’ll see, I’ve got to move again first…
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Firstly, well done for producing something so coherent from ‘winging it’ – I think it would scare the living daylights out of me to attempt that.
I don’t know much about Wattpad – another dizzying social media phenomenon as far as I can see. Too many platforms, too little writing time 🙂 Good luck with it.
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I don’t know much about Wattpad, either. But it’s full of people who want to read, so I reckon I should be there…
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It definitely has a lot of subscribers, a lot of potential readers. I just get dizzy from the amount of choice on the net. Too many places to post work and which is the best option? Of course, I over think things and then don’t end up doing anything… 🙂
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And I love the title – very fitting
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Careful these characters will lurk. You’ll see a picture or a thought will being them out of storage. Very well done, especially with mixing scenes.
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed reading it! And you’re absolutely right, they may well come back. If they do, I’ll happily invite them back 🙂
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A great scene! So much action in so few words. I really like the relief bursting out as a laugh – and that excellent last line.
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Thanks Millie! Glad you liked the last line, it took quite a bit of work 🙂
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Lines like that ofen do. It can make a lot of difference to the story, too, if you don’t get it just right. Yours was perfecto. 🙂
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