Moderate to Poor, Becoming Good Later*

The dark cloud hanging over Ben has gone. He tells himself not to overreact, the respite might be brief. But his relief refuses to be contained. It bursts out as a laugh.

‘It wasn’t that funny a joke,’ Tina says.

Before Ben has a chance to explain, a thunder cloud descends upon them.

‘You lying bastard, you swore there’s nothing between you. Good thing I never believed a word of it.’

‘Wait a second,’ Tina interjects, but Donna’s unstoppable.

‘Shut up, tart.’ She slams her hand down. ‘I want a divorce. Happy?’

‘No,’ he says, even though he might be.

***

I suspect this may be the penultimate instalment of the Salvage Series.

*The title is a reference to the shipping forecast and actually refers to visibility – but poor visibility is usually accompanied by rain, so it is somewhat appropriate.

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16 thoughts on “Moderate to Poor, Becoming Good Later*

  1. Wow Sonya… I just read through all of you Salvage stories for the last few days.. this is getting so interesting and I love the switching back and forth… Are you going to continue the story during June?

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    1. Thank you, Lori, that’s very encouraging feedback! I am trying to somewhat wrap it up today – it is getting more and more tricky to write instalments that will work as stand-alones. But I may come back to it. I want to play around with Jacqui some more, get into her head, find out what motivates her. But I think I will put the series up on WattPad, and if the reaction there is positive, I might write some more.

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  2. It feels like Donna has a self-fufilling prophecy on her hands – has she pushed Ben into thinking of something he might not have done if she hadn’t kept banging on about it?. I’m all geared up for the last instalment.
    I love that last line – ”No,’ but wondering if he might be.’ Reallly tantalising.
    This has been such a great serial and a great idea. Are you planning another? I read your posts anyway, but the on-going element has really drawn me in. Are you planning to post the complete story on your long- form blog?
    Great stuff, Sonya 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Lynn!
      Yes, you’re spot on about Donna. That’s the thing that set the series in motion, really. When I wrote the second instalment, I still thought Ben and Tina’d died in the sub. But then I had this idea about the self-fulfilling prophecy…
      I’m glad you like the title – I was rather proud of coming up with it 🙂
      I think I’ll write another serial, but I might take a bit more time planning it in advance. With this one, I was very much winging it. I had no idea what made Donna act like she did, for instance.
      And I don’t know yet if I’m going to put it all up as one long post on the other blog, or if I’ll post it to WattPad – I’ve been meaning to give it a try, and at least I’ve got a somewhat complete serialised story (even though I may have to plug a few gaps towards the end…). We’ll see, I’ve got to move again first…

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      1. Firstly, well done for producing something so coherent from ‘winging it’ – I think it would scare the living daylights out of me to attempt that.
        I don’t know much about Wattpad – another dizzying social media phenomenon as far as I can see. Too many platforms, too little writing time 🙂 Good luck with it.

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          1. It definitely has a lot of subscribers, a lot of potential readers. I just get dizzy from the amount of choice on the net. Too many places to post work and which is the best option? Of course, I over think things and then don’t end up doing anything… 🙂

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