Moderate to Poor, Becoming Good Later*

~ Sonya

The dark cloud hanging over Ben has gone. He tells himself not to overreact, the respite might be brief. But his relief refuses to be contained. It bursts out as a laugh.

‘It wasn’t that funny a joke,’ Tina says.

Before Ben has a chance to explain, a thunder cloud descends upon them.

‘You lying bastard, you swore there’s nothing between you. Good thing I never believed a word of it.’

‘Wait a second,’ Tina interjects, but Donna’s unstoppable.

‘Shut up, tart.’ She slams her hand down. ‘I want a divorce. Happy?’

‘No,’ he says, even though he might be.

***

I suspect this may be the penultimate instalment of the Salvage Series.

*The title is a reference to the shipping forecast and actually refers to visibility – but poor visibility is usually accompanied by rain, so it is somewhat appropriate.

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16 thoughts on “Moderate to Poor, Becoming Good Later*”

  1. Wow Sonya… I just read through all of you Salvage stories for the last few days.. this is getting so interesting and I love the switching back and forth… Are you going to continue the story during June?

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    1. Thank you, Lori, that’s very encouraging feedback! I am trying to somewhat wrap it up today – it is getting more and more tricky to write instalments that will work as stand-alones. But I may come back to it. I want to play around with Jacqui some more, get into her head, find out what motivates her. But I think I will put the series up on WattPad, and if the reaction there is positive, I might write some more.

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      1. Oh I would love to learn more about Jacqui too… she has peaked my interest.. What is WattPad? I’ve never heard of it

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  2. It feels like Donna has a self-fufilling prophecy on her hands – has she pushed Ben into thinking of something he might not have done if she hadn’t kept banging on about it?. I’m all geared up for the last instalment.
    I love that last line – ”No,’ but wondering if he might be.’ Reallly tantalising.
    This has been such a great serial and a great idea. Are you planning another? I read your posts anyway, but the on-going element has really drawn me in. Are you planning to post the complete story on your long- form blog?
    Great stuff, Sonya 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Lynn!
      Yes, you’re spot on about Donna. That’s the thing that set the series in motion, really. When I wrote the second instalment, I still thought Ben and Tina’d died in the sub. But then I had this idea about the self-fulfilling prophecy…
      I’m glad you like the title – I was rather proud of coming up with it 🙂
      I think I’ll write another serial, but I might take a bit more time planning it in advance. With this one, I was very much winging it. I had no idea what made Donna act like she did, for instance.
      And I don’t know yet if I’m going to put it all up as one long post on the other blog, or if I’ll post it to WattPad – I’ve been meaning to give it a try, and at least I’ve got a somewhat complete serialised story (even though I may have to plug a few gaps towards the end…). We’ll see, I’ve got to move again first…

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      1. Firstly, well done for producing something so coherent from ‘winging it’ – I think it would scare the living daylights out of me to attempt that.
        I don’t know much about Wattpad – another dizzying social media phenomenon as far as I can see. Too many platforms, too little writing time 🙂 Good luck with it.

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          1. It definitely has a lot of subscribers, a lot of potential readers. I just get dizzy from the amount of choice on the net. Too many places to post work and which is the best option? Of course, I over think things and then don’t end up doing anything… 🙂

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    1. Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed reading it! And you’re absolutely right, they may well come back. If they do, I’ll happily invite them back 🙂

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