
You enter your magic portal (aka the garage) and turn from Mum – limping defeated from the breakfast battlefield – into six-figure marketing director. Today is Tuesday, the day he may be in town, so you take a detour to the park. He’s there; your heart races.
‘We should find another bench; one that draws less attention to itself and those sitting on it.’
‘I like this bench.’
‘What if someone sees us?’
‘Let them see us. I don’t care.’
Says he whose life is safe elsewhere.
You know he’s obsessed.
You ought to call it off but
You feel so alive.
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Okay, bit against the rules of FFfAW this week: I’ve combined it with Lynn’s second love nudge, so it is a continuation of yesterday’s haibun. The photo prompt just went too well with the idea I had in mind. I think this stands on its own, though – I hope nobody’ll mind.
Oooh. It seems she *did* skip the wine reception 😀
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Yep, she certainly did. Naught girl 😀
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Carpe diem!!! 😀
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I was thinking the same thing! Sonya– I think it’s great that you combined challenges. i do it all the time and so far, the challenge police have not commented 😉
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Sometimes, two or more prompts just want to merge – what can you do? Thanks, Melinda 🙂
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You’re welcome 🙂 I agree!
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🙂
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I’m loving this and cannot wait to see where it leads!
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Nowhere good, I reckon. Thank you, glad you enjoy it 🙂
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Heartbreak?
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or worse…
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Oh no!
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It was only ever going to end badly from the outset – only question is how badly? Love these haibun’s – such an artform to combine the prose and the haiku. Lovely, Sonya
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Thanks, Lynn. Something about your nudges just made my brain go, ‘it’s time we tried this’. Dunno yet how badly, tbh, I’m making it up as I go 😀
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I like the form – it feels right for the challenge, somehow 🙂
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Yep, I agree 🙂
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She’s doing something she knows she shouldn’t be doing because it makes her feel alive…Great story, Sonya, and I like the form you have written it in.
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Thanks, PJ! I’ve started experimenting with new forms again and I quite like this one. Lovely picture this week again 🙂
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Thanks Sonya! Glad you enjoyed the prompt this week.
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Liked this a lot. He has nothing to lose being in public. His family is elsewhere. But he makes the main character feel alive. How dangerous. But I see why she hangs on.
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Yes, it is dangerous… Thank you!
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Nice combination, I went to read the “first part” and they complete each other so well. Funny how something that can be so bad can feel so good! I hope she doesn’t get in trouble for following her heart/guts 🙂
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Thanks Alixa, glad you liked them both. I’m not sure yet how it’ll end, but somehow I doubt it’ll be a happy ending…
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Obsession rarely ends well, unfortunately 😦
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I smell trouble lurking somewhere around that bench.
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Yes, indeed… Thanks for reading!
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Somehow I get the feeling that things are not going to work out all that well for them! Great story and I love the haibun form. I’ve been thinking of trying it out myself. 🙂
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Thanks, Louise! Yes, I’ve been thinking about haibun for a while myself. Glad you like mine 🙂
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The more dangerous it is, the more excitement it creates. Maybe he was thrilled being caught by someone he knows. 🙂
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Yes, maybe… Thanks for stopping by 🙂
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Oh, those thrills of love. Nicely written.
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Thank you 🙂
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You manage to use the second-person “you” narrator here, and it works really well. Whenever I try that, I sound like I’m writing a self-help book! Love the clandestine affair!
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Thank you, Amy! I think it helps that the pieces are so short. I have certainly written my fair share of self-help sounding stories… But I do love second person.
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Maybe I’ll have to follow your lead and try that POV in one of these flash pieces. It’s such a great place to practice.
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Oh, yes, it is. Flash is the ideal playground for all the stuff I’d never try in longer prose. Hope I’ll read one of your second person stories soon 🙂
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I like the female changes from mother to business woman.
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Glad you liked it – I think it’s my favourite part. Thank you!
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Bad man. Willing to drag the poor girl into the pool of lies when he isn’t getting dirty. Jerk face.
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Heh 😀
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Hmm. Someone’s shopping for trouble. I wonder how it all ends.
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